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Thursday, March 17, 2011

blog entry 04 hype workshop

                            In the passage of "Hype" by Kalle Lasn  the message which she want to let us know is that- how advertisements are hampering people lives. The 21st century is crowded up with advertisements.From morning till night, we keep on noticing ads and distracting yourself.Its the human nature that whenever they see something new, they feel to get it and that's what are ads doing.The most great distract people of this ads are the kids.Whenever they see a new or exciting game they just want to get it no matter happens.After wasting the money in buying it they later find  that it same like as the previous game they had or boring to play.

                     While driving on roads,taking a break on parks,eating in a restaurants, internet,every where we see ads.Human  lives have become restless.There is no place where they can sit,relax and enjoy a small portion of this lives.Ads are just made by the companies for earning money and making their reputation higher in market.They aren't caring for the people.e.g the most desirable of all, i-phones are in great competition.With the mechanization advancement, the prices are getting higher and higher.When you get excited with the ads products and get it, later on  you find out that its money consuming .You don't need  it or you have it in you home by corner. These ads are getting bigger and bigger and spreading widely that its beyond our mind to make a guess for it.

                  Public attention creators are some how destroying public lives with its widely influence.They aren't giving people the space to think about, and to make a correct decision for themselves.They are just making human brains confuse and worthless.

1 comments:

neveen nasim said...

The author does not have a strong start.
The essay is not 400 words.
The claim here how adv destroy people lives.
She had a clear introduction of the passege.

Overall, what is the author doing well? (It is always good to start off with a strong point).
Is the essay around 400 words?
Does the author (your team mate) have a clear claim? What is it?
Does the author have a clear introduction? How could it be improved?
Does the author summarize the reading completely and clearly? Why or why not? I thing she did. I think she got the main ideas.
Does the author respond to the reading with specific examples from real life? She did bring examples from real to real life. Is the writing clear and easy to read? What patterns of errors do you see that need to be addressed in the future? It is easy to read but I think there errors in grammer.